ryanleeds | excuse me while i see

So, I promised myself that I'd put the piece I wrote last week on hold for a day before I looked at it again, but I was sick this morning (just to the point of not being able to get out of bed until 2:30 -- lovely stabbing pains in my stomach) so I missed church and was stuck in a room with nothing to do for two hours.

So naturally, I poked at it.

I've done very heavy rewrites of the first four pages and moved some stuff around. I've cleared out a whole bunch of awkward writing and identified things that are brought up but never clarified. I've done several read-throughs to identify more problems.

In less boring news, Russian scientists are working on creating a robot that would be powered by a human brain, possibly allowing people to eventually buy immortality (and a robot body, which is good enough for me).